Parallelism

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Parallelism is a little more advanced but helps to enhance readability. It basically involves using the same pattern of words in a sequence of multiple words, phrases, or clauses. Still not clear? Maybe these examples can help. Choose the better sentence construction:
  1. She not only is my wife but also my best friend.
    She is not only my wife but also my best friend.

  2. They like their men funny and strong and as cool as Daryl Dixon.
    They like their men funny, strong, and as cool as Daryl Dixon.

  3. Either Stewart was going crazy or his daughter was moving his car keys purposefully.
    Stewart either was going crazy or his daughter was moving his car keys purposefully.

  4. We felt relieved after the leader of the Monster Squad, Sean, had grabbed the wooden stake and drove it into the vampire’s heart.
    We felt relieved after the leader of the Monster Squad, Sean, had grabbed the wooden stake and had driven it into the vampire’s heart.

  5. Guardians of the Galaxy features not only plenty of action and explosions but also comedic bits, heart-warming moments, and made me walk away happy.
    Guardians of the Galaxy features not only plenty of action and explosions but also comedic bits and heart-warming moments and made me walk away happy.

  1. For a not onlybut also construction to be considered parallel, the same pattern of words should follow each part of the correlative conjunction. Since after but also we find a noun phrase, then after not only we should also find a noun phrase. A quick test is to take out everything between and including not only and but also and see if it makes sense.
    She is not only my wife but also my best friend.

  2. In a list, all things should be equal or properly parsed. Here we have two basic adjectives (funny and strong) and an adverbial phrase, so it’s best to separate them out.
    They like their men funny and strong and as cool as Daryl Dixon.

  3. This is a similar problem as number one except with an eitheror pair.
    Either Stewart was going crazy or his daughter was moving his car keys purposefully.

  4. It’s also important to have the same verb tenses. In this case, had grabbed and had driven are both correctly past participles.
    We felt relieved after the leader of the Monster Squad, Sean, had grabbed the wooden stake and had driven it into the vampire’s heart.

  5. It’s easy to get lost in long compound sentences. If you were to break them apart, the error becomes more apparent: 1) Guardians of the Galaxy features not only plenty of action and explosions but also comedic bits and heart-warming moments. 2) Guardians of the Galaxy made me walk away happy.
    Guardians of the Galaxy features not only plenty of action and explosions but also comedic bits and heart-warming moments and made me walk away happy. 
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